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Post by Ivycloud on Jun 19, 2011 1:48:52 GMT -6
[[Because the old RP Check has gotten so filled up, a new RP Check will be made here. The RP checks are almost exactly the same and where pretty much just copied and pasted. ^^ Shade, I hope you don't mind I made a new thread, the old one just seemed a little too full to wipe out.]]
So here's how it works...
Each of you will make a FIVE SENTENCE OR MORE post. Post how you usually would. Try your best, use the best grammar you know. A queen will evaluate your post and tell you what you need to work on and what you don't need to. If it's good then you are free to go. If it's not then you are still free to go, but we'd really prefer it if you'd stayed in the thread and try again. :3 Excellent RPers make an excellent IceClan. This is to bring out the best of your RPing ability and to make IceClan a better place as a whole. ^.^ We ask that you place your best effort into your samples.
Now, then, here are the things you need to have a qualified post.
- To have posted in the "Joining IceClan" thread.
- To use at least five sentences in your post.
- To be courteous and respectful to all others.
Your posts must be from the view of your cat. It can be first, second, or third-person; whichever you prefer. Feel free to make it longer than five sentences. :3 Do not be afraid to post here. Everyone is welcome, your RPing skills will not be criticized. And one more thing before you post: Spell Check is your best friend. :3
And a quick note: This thread will be wiped of all posts every once in a whole to reduce spam and to help keep this clean. :3 To the other queens: Any help with this thread or the weekly wipes is greatly appreciated.  You may make your RP Sample about any theme really, as long as you keep it realistic. But if you just have no idea what to RP about, here is a theme; I found a spider!
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Kestrelkit
Apprentice
What you see is what you get. And Im one adorable beast. ;D[Mo0:8]
Posts: 42
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Post by Kestrelkit on Jun 19, 2011 15:52:05 GMT -6
A young vibrant young male kit moved his way from the den, flicking his tail contentedly. He was bored, fairly bored, not sure what to do actually, but being him, he knew he would find something to do. Wouldn't be hard. He stalked past the other kit, his head held high tail along with, thinking he was far better then those others. It was cruel yes, unfair, maybe, but what did he care. Yet, something small decided to try to prove it was better then him. How... dare it! A Spider! Think it was better then him!
He wouldn't take this, he shook his head, narrowing her brilliant emerald eyes, and stalked forward, copying the paw's that he say training to hunt. He sat there, staring at the stupid, foolish arachnid, edging closer, his eyes flashed in anticipation, and he lunged forward, making headways to trample the spider, that terrible little spider, he would deal with it for its insolence! Yet,, this is where the poor young tom landed on his face. He let out a yowl, inches from the being that just stared at him, and scuttled away.
The other kits just laughed at the bronze tom, one nearly rolling over onto its back. Her bristled his fur, anger in his orbs, yet his embarrassment was clear. He whirled his way back into the den, cuffing at one of the other kits ears, grumbling and sat with his mother.
Just reposted from other thread if thats all right.))
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Post by Ivycloud on Jun 20, 2011 1:37:39 GMT -6
It was nice! Just make sure you watch your wording. I saw a few working mistakes, but everyone has those. Good Job, Kestrelkit! ^^
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Nightpaw
Apprentice
I love watching the night sky...isn't it beautiful?
Posts: 64
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Post by Nightpaw on Jun 20, 2011 6:23:29 GMT -6
A bright NewLeaf sun shone through the branches of the nursery, lighting up the colourful kits sleeping there. A silver kit with black flecks and bright blue eyes lifted her head up and yawned. She stretched, and admired all the different pelts in the nursery. Golden tabbies, pure white kits, tortoiseshell t-
"Aaah!" the kit squealed as something small and round landed on her nose. She batted at her nose with her front paws but the creature just swayed slightly. She reared up on her hind paws and then plopped down again into a sitting position. ~It wasn't going to hurt me, it's no danger to me~ she thought to herself, and purred thinking how silly she was. She gently picked the thing up with her paw and placed it down on the ground.
"Run free little..." she couldn't remember what she had heard the other its calling it, until she saw the animal's many eyes. "Spider. Run back into the mountains."
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Post by Ivycloud on Jun 20, 2011 11:10:31 GMT -6
Great job Nightkit! I didn't see anything wrong with your post except for a few misspellings. But you only had one that I caught, and its an easy mistake. ^^
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Post by pridefeather on Jun 20, 2011 12:42:07 GMT -6
Pridekit looked down, to see a small spider moving across the floor. Her eyes widened in interest, surprise, and she was startled. She prodded it with a paw, and it fell on one side. It started building a beautiful web after, but then a fly flew into it. Pridekit watched wit interest as the spider quickly rolled the fly into a ball of web, and drank its blood. The web was now completely ruined, and the spider started to move out of the nursery. She stared after it. 'Cool.' She thought as it found a branch and started another web to catch its prey. 'Spiders have an interesting way of life.' Pridekit thought to herself, padding away to a small sunning rock to bask on.
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Post by Ivycloud on Jun 20, 2011 13:21:47 GMT -6
Very good Pridekit. But same as the other three above, you may want to use a spell check. ^^ But again, Everyone makes those mistakes. Well done.
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Post by Brightpaw on Jun 21, 2011 3:56:54 GMT -6
Brightkit's small little body scurried around the nursery. Her fluffy white pelt looked, well, not so noticeable here as it would in Fireclan or Treeclan. But her white pelt was noticeable, she could have appeared to be a walking snowball with the degree of grooming she had went through that day. Blue eyes narrowing she scanned the nursery looking for something a bit more amusing than watching the warriors pad in and out with fresh-kill.
Being a kit, she was entitled to merely having fun, not exactly hunting, nor fighting, nor patroling. All she did all day was hooble up and down enjoying the nursery smells and the ability to get away with anything, except for maybe raiding the medicine cat's den or going into camp territory, but messing with the warriors or jumping into the fresh kill pile as if she was infact hunting wouldn't be a problem. At least not in her deep blue eyes.
Sure the kit's were great and very humorous, but that didn't mean she was always in a carefree, light hearted, open minded mood. To tell the truth, she wasn't in any particular mood at the moment. Just patroling the nursery borders. Nothing particularly exciting. Well, it wasn't exciting until a small 8 legged creature layed on the wall just watching her.
Squirming under her pelt she padded shakily towards the spider. Blue eyes wide she looked down, her pink nose twitching with discomfort as her whiskers shook with curiousity. What is it? she wondered as the hairy creature crawled up the nursery wall. That is so......gross... she thought with a frown as it moved towards the nursery entrance. Eww...look it is just crawling around like a rogue! It's a rogue spy! she thought crouching down to a clumsy stance.
Hissing she followed the creature. It on the wall, hanging on with 8 legs, and her on the ground crouching on 4 legs. The two continued out towards the warriors den, the spider heading towards a small crack on the wall. Brightkit to tell the truth didn't know where she was headed, all she was doing was following the creature.
When the crack neared Brightkit froze, blue eyes turning away she focused on a small leaf. Her attention slipping away from the hairy being and towards the smooth surface that came from one of the mountain bushes. Pelt fluffing up she chased after the wind her small legs carrying her back towards the nursery as the leaf stuck to the edge of the entrance. Laughing she meowed "Gotcha!" and with that, she ended the moment. No longer amused by chasing things but by the happy squeals of her littermates. |
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Nightpaw
Apprentice
I love watching the night sky...isn't it beautiful?
Posts: 64
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Post by Nightpaw on Jun 21, 2011 9:48:34 GMT -6
Thanks ^_^ (to Ivycloud)
Wow Brightkit you're so good at RPing!
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Lionstorm
Warrior
Have you heard of the silent killer...ya that's me[Mo0:10]
Posts: 519
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Post by Lionstorm on Jun 21, 2011 11:51:20 GMT -6
nice job brightkit i see a future rping legend
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Post by Brightpaw on Jun 21, 2011 12:12:48 GMT -6
Thanks  It's what Semi-Lit does to ya after 2 months. LOL, thanks. |
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Post by Ivycloud on Jun 21, 2011 19:25:57 GMT -6
[[Wow Brightkit! That was amazing! I don't see anything wrong with your post! ^^ Keep up the good work.
And to everyone else, could you please not post here unless you are posting your RP sample? It just keeps the thread looking nicer. ^^
Thanks!]]
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Post by soulhunter on Jun 22, 2011 3:41:42 GMT -6
Brindlekit opened one amber eye, his ears flickering. The sound was loud and obnoxious, and it made a chill go up his spine. He was quite unaware this sound was bird song, something others found to be quite beautiful.
He rolled out of the nest, not in the mood to get up. He looked at the other queen, trying not to vomit form being things on his back. The queen was black, and he recognized her as Shadefrost. He heard a small pitter patter of paw steps, kit paw steps. 'If they ask me to play a game one more time I will claw them. He thought, obviously cranky from his annoying wake up.
Finally, full of enough energy to actually get up, he rolled back on to his belly and got up. Shaking a few scraps of moss from his pelt he decided it would be best to grab some food, and not milk. He made sure Ivycloud was asleep, or distracted, then dashed out of the nursery.
Nearly colliding with the pathetic pile of of prey Brindlekit skidded to a halt, trying not to make the prey fly. After making sure he hadn't disturbed any prey, or caught eye of any annoying warriors, he dragged a large squirrel off the pile and began his journey back to the nursery.
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Post by speckleddawn on Jun 22, 2011 6:03:20 GMT -6
The four clans, sure did have a very long Leaf Bare. Now, it is New Leaf or Green Leaf, whatever they called it. It meant Summer and it was beginning to get hot and Speckledkit couldn't wait for the hot weather to come. She was so sick and tired of this cold weather. When ever she was freezing cold, she would have to snuggle up against a queen that isn't even her mother. You see, Speckledkit wasn't clan born; she was born in loner territory. Speckledkit had been separated from her siblings and she was pretty much all alone til she found Iceclan and joined.
The silver kitten opened up her blue eyes, she looked around the nursery to see kits playing. She purred with amusement and she stretched out her limbs. A little creature with a lot of legs crawled across the nursery floor, it stopped when it found that Speckledkit's eyes were on it. She crouched down and stared at, she lifted up her paws slowly and prodded the spider to see if it was alive.
What is this thing? I have never seen anything like it. Like they say, curiosity killed the cat. Speckledkit backed up a few steps and she swished her tail up in the air. She watched the spider and it was still not moving. I think it's dead. But, just to be sure.... Speckledkit pawed it again and the spider jumped on her nose. Get it off me! Get it off me! She said and ran around, trying to shake the spider off of her nose.
Get off, get off! Speckledkit hissed and she crashed into the nursery wall. Ow... That hurt! Speckledkit said and she forced herself to her paws, looking around. Where is that creature that was just with me a while ago? It's gotta be somewhere around here. The silver kitten mewed to herself and looked around, she sniffed the ground and went right, left and everywhere! Speckledkit spotted the spider, she grinned. That's it your going down, whatever-you-are! She thought and crouched down. Her ears were pinned back as she thought this spider was a threat from the beginning.
Speckledkit pounced, but she didn't get the spider. Get back here! She hissed and ran after the spider, that was trying to hide or crawl away from her before it could-to late. Speckledkit had her paw on the spider and it was squished, she lifted her paw up and looked at the pads. The dead spider fell off onto the nursery floor and she sniffed it. It is dead.... And, squished. She used her tail as a broom and she swept the squished spider out of the nursery. Well, today was a odd day. I met a little creature and I didn't get the chance to know what it is. She shrugged and walked over to her nest. Speckledkit lied down and dozed off into a dark sleep.
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Greypaw
Apprentice
Grey is a cool colour...right?
Posts: 58
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Post by Greypaw on Jun 22, 2011 9:43:48 GMT -6
Greykit padded into the nursery and stepped on something. He felt it crush underneath his paw, and he quickly recoiled in a mixture of shock and guilt. It was a brown circular thing, with long thin legs a-he lost his train of thought as one of the legs twitched. He leaned in to get a closer look and the thing jumped onto it's legs. /It's alive!/ he thought happily, and a sense of relief washed over him. He suddenly remembered other kits talking about a black version of this, a spider they had called it. The spider scurried away into the depths of the den wall, and disappeared from the grey and black kit's view. He sighed.
"I get one potential friend and I squish it. AND it's a spider." he sighed grumpily.
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