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Post by foxylovey1012 on Jun 7, 2011 14:47:36 GMT -6
Dreams of Becoming One Who you wish for.... My lips moved softly, as my body felt the warm sensation of adrenalin rushing through me. Gasping, I struggled to get out of the machine that was slowly killing my human soul. "No.... You can't do this..." I sounded in a trance, my voice feather light.
Fur sprouted on my body, golden fur of a golden animal. I moaned and struggled to get out of the transerver. "Ple-" My pleadance was cut off as a short cough in my throat began. "Please-*cough, cough* -let me g-" I coughed out.
The scientist laughed, his voice mechanically bubbling through my body. I coughed again, and my body jerked. Soon enough, the transformation was moving through my veins and the transformation began, causing the blood of my humankind to boil.
My soul was quickly dying, but my heart was beating faster than I could imagine. The transerver moved, into a cylinder-like machine. Pain seared in my body and a short wail of pain was cut off by a bark. The last thing I saw was the mad scientist pulling the lever and laughing madly.
Then everything went black. To be continued.... How was this? I really expect critic because I worked really hard on this story, Dreams of Becoming One.
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Post by andyro on Jun 11, 2011 10:07:15 GMT -6
That's really good! Keep at it!
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Shiningcloud
Warrior
Hidden by a shining mask and her cloud is her weapon. A stormy disposition hidden by a bright smile.
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Post by Shiningcloud on Jun 11, 2011 12:55:55 GMT -6
[glow=red,2,300]Whoa.
(will you and Bellkit read my story, I need some critisism.)[/glow]
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