Rolepay Check II [[Kit's please Read]]

[Silverkit]

Silverkit padded around the nursery, restless. She couldn't wait until she was an apprentice; Who would Wildstar choose as her mentor? She looked outside at the camp and saw all the cats walking around. Her gaze flitted to the medicine cat's den. Would she be a medicine cat or a warrior? She hoped the first.

[iamparanormal]

My small paws skimmed over the ground slowly as I pounced on the leaf. " Why does every kit have to be so boistrous? " I murmur as I bat the leaf around shyly. My blue-gray eyes lifted to the other kits that were playing together. " I wonder if they even care I'm here... Possibly not.. " Muttering to myself, I get up and stretch my sore kitten muscles. It had been cold recently. Shivering, I fluffed up my already fluffy kitten fur and went outside. It was so cold! Light snow fell from the sky and I lifted my muzzle to the stars.

They looked as if they would come down from the sky, the stars were that lively. I thought to myself, CloudClan doesn't exist. They're just a bunch of old stories that kits believe. I certainly don't believe in those stories. . . I thought, scowling at the stars. With a formiddable grunt, I padded back to the nursery.

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[Stormkit]

Stormkit padded around camp, sick of being stuck in the nursery. It was always too noisy, and filled with bouncy, energetic kits. He could be a bit quiet and serious at times, and some of the other kits got irritated with him when he didn't want to play. He just liked being alone every once in a while. But no one seemed to understand him. If they knew his troubled past, maybe they would, but he couldn't talk about it. Not even to Ivycloud, his new mother.

As he continued exploring, his thoughts drifted to his old old mother. She hated him, for reasons he couldn't begin to figure out. He had been tormented since the day he opened his eyes. She had rarely fed him, and when she did bother to, it was so little, it was hardly worth the trouble. But eating hadn't been the worst of his problems. He still had the scars. Those horrible scars. Constant reminders of the life he had left behind. He had gotten lucky, finding IceClan. Everyone had been gentle, and kind, making sure he was taken care of. He liked his new home, but nightmares occaisonally plagued him. Part of him wanted to tell somebody, to spill out his whole story, but he was sure he would start crying. And that would only make him look like some weak little kit.

His past partly contributed to the way he was now. Quiet, serious, not outgoing. He kept to himself a lot, the busy activity of camp a bit intimidating at times. He hadn't made any friends, and though he hoped to, he was too nervous to introduce himself. He peeked in one of the dens, and a warrior growled at him to get out. Startled, he scurried back to the nursery, not wanting to explore anymore.

As he peeked in the nursery, his blue eyes looked serious, thoughtful. But the other kits all looked playful, excited, and almost silly. Why was he different? He wasn't like the other kits. True, they didn't have a past like he did, but still. Was something wrong with him? He liked playing, but not all the time. Seeing all the energetic kits, he edged his way to his nest, not saying a word.

^That's what loving writing does to you if you're not busy or feeling lazy^

[Silverkit]

Whoops! I didn't see the theme. Sorry! Here's a new one.

Silverkit padded around the nursery, anxious for her apprentice ceremony. Something flashed in the corner of her eye. A spider! She padded over, and sniffed it. Its pincers snapped out at her nose, and she lurched back. "Yikes." She muttered under her breath. Quickly getting over her near-death experience, she poked her head out and drew in a deep breath, smelling the mountain air. The spider scurried after her, and out of the camp. Silverkit stepped all the way out and called, "There's a poisonous spider loose in the camp!"

[skyslash]

Skykit walked around the nursery for there was no one who wants to play with him,then,he saw a spider and began to crouch low,suddenly he leap and caught it but it ran away.Others saw him as a young kit but to him he was a warrior.

[Stormkit]

(OCC: Silverkit, just to let you know, you can write about anything. The theme was just a suggestion if you couldn't figure out something to write)

[Silverkit]

(Oh, sorry. I didn't really understand.)

[Petalpaw]

Petalkit blinked open her eyes. The soft sounds of kits moving and queens talking filled her ears. She shuffled in her nest flipping over to her other side. Taking in a deep breath she sighed. "One day I'll be a great warrior" she mewed to herself. She scanned the nursery, the queens tending to their kits seems to smooth her.

Once she felt like she was ready, she got up. Using all her muscles to push herself up. Blinking the tried out of her she pushed on. Making her way through the bodies of kits and queen's. As she approached the entrance to the Nursery. She turned her head back to take a look at the Nursery. "I'll be out of here soon just watch me"

[Sparkkit]

Sparkkit's gaze scanned the nursery. The ginger tom blinked as a spider scuttled out from under his nest, where he had just woken up. He reached out and tried to hook it with a claw, but missed. He scrambled out of his nest and chased it. He managed to corner it, then reached out and batted it with his claws sheathed. It scuttled up the wall and out of sight into a crack in the wall.

[Frostflame]

I stretched and slowly opened my eyes. All the new scents and colors here! I stood up, wobbling from side to side. I fell, the ground slamming my face in so hard, it felt flat. I grunted and pulled myself up. Something sped across the dirt. I aimed my small, pink nose and tried to smell what it was. For what it seemed like many moons, I finally gave up. Crawling with my rump in the air, I snuck up to the fuzzy thing. It had many sticks protruding out of it. I began to poke the creature with my silver paw. My red tail swished in the air. I am unique kit. My tail, chest, and the top of my fuzzy head is scarlett red, while the other part of my body is all silver, like ice.
I pounced on the fuzzy creature. I stuck my tongue out while I slowly lifted my paw. It was gone! But how! I searched the den for the creature, failing to spot it.
"What are you looking for, young one?" A queen appeared in the den. I looked up at the queen, fear pounding it's way into my body. I scurried to the darkest corner of the den. I glanced at the creature, making the Queen curiously stare at what I was looking at. Realization dawned on the Queen and she padded to the corner of the den where the odd creature was resting.
"Is this the thing you are looking at?" The Queen mewed sweetly. I nodded my head quickly.
"Come," The Queen motioned for me. I nervously shuffled across the dirt towards the Queen. She pointed to the creature with her tail.
"That is a spider. There are many different kinds of them. When you become an apprentice, you'll learn which ones to eat and not to eat," The Queen twitched her ears towards the den entrance.
"I must go now.," She said, her eyes clouded with thoughts. She padded out of the den. I stood there, looking out after her.
"A spider, huh? And edible?" I ran my tongue over my teeth.
"Frostkit!" My mother called as she walked in the den. She shrieked out of shock as she caught me with half of the spider peeking out of my mouth.

[Sunshadow]

[shadow=red,left,300]Sunkit[/shadow] paced back and fourth in the nursery. She hadn't been born long ago. Outside the clan. Sunkit had been the runt of the litter but now? Now Sunkit was the toughest little kit ever! Sunkit thought, making a story of her life in her head. Okay maybe not the toughest kit.... SUnkit puffed out her chest "I am the smartest!" she said to her self. "And one of the fastest! Even though I'm a kit I can beat those Rockclan warriors! Or Treeclan warriors I don't know about Fireclan though..." she trailed off. Yes! Sunkit could outsmart them and use her size to be a smaller target. Sunkit settled down in her nest. "Tomorrow." she promised to her self "Tomorrow I will become the most famous kit in Iceclan." she murmured as sleep's waves engulfed her.

[Sunshadow]

{COntinued}

Sunkit awoke. It was early morning. Perfect time to do something great for her clan. But what? "Oh I know!" her whisper hoarse so she wouldnt wake the others. Sunkit jumped over a still body and landed on her paws with a thud. Sunkit kicked the dust of her paws and trotted forawrd. "Ill find some prey!" she announced to herself.I'll have to stay inside camp though... Sunkit thought. "Oh well!" Sunkit began turning over rocks in hope of a mouse. After a few tries something dark scurried out from under a rock. "Yes!" she yipped and pounced, biting it. "What?" she jumped back, the prey dead. It wasnt furry. Well a little fuzzy and it had all there legs! "It must be a spider!" she rememberd her mother pointing one out to her when she was still Sun. "Prey is prey!" she shrugged and picked it up.

Some warriors were very confused when a spider showed up on the freshkill pile that day

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Mr. Poison

A green pair of eyes peered up from a nest. Slowly, slowly, and slowly she inched forward towards the nursery entrance. Suddenly she felt something bite her. "It's an adder, it's a a kit trying to eat me, it's a poison spider!" She screeched and ran around the den stepping on others. She was waking her fellow clan mates that used to be sleeping. She turned to see what nuisance was clinging onto her leg. A small, hairy, and black spider was biting her foreleg hard. "I can feel the poison in my blood!" She dramatically screamed. TulipKit paused for a moment. She squished the spider and realized she was okay. "Sorry!" She meowed and tumbled back towards her nest.

[Swiftkit]

Swiftkit ran off from play. She was very tired! She trotted to her nest and lie down. It was warm in her nest.Outside it was very cold and she was glad to be inside.

[Shadefrost]

Okay. Time to get down to business. /cracks knuckles/

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Sprucekit: Very good! :D There were no grammatical errors whatsoever, at least none that I saw. :3 I like your writing style- nice and simple.

Icekit: Great! No errors whatsoever. Loved the ending to that.

Stonekit (well, Stonepaw now): Wonderful! It’s obvious you put a lot of effort into your post. Your writing is very good. :3

Honeykit: I love how you post in present tense; it’s really unique on the site. Most post in past tense, but you pull present off really well. There are no grammatical errors but there are a few issues with punctuation. Other than that, though, it’s very good!

Rushingkit/paw: First, I love your template. Second, your post is amazing. No errors whatsoever, it’s long and full of effort… perfect.

Ashkit/mist: Great! No errors whatsoever. I love the humor in it.~

Moorkit: Great job! The only problem is a few changes between past and present tense. Besides that, your grammar is great.

Badgerkit/claw: I love the humor you added. :3 Great job!

Featherkit: Good job! Nice and simple, and no errors.

Frostkit/paw: Same as Featherkit. Wonderful!

Flamekit/spots: It’s good, but the word ‘Flamekit’ is used a bit too much. :3 Try to use his name only once every three or so sentences. Otherwise it begins to sound repetitive. Other than that, great!

Darkkit/paw and Stormkit/paw: Great! No errors here.

Fawnkit: Good job! Short and sweet. No errors here.

Gorsekit: Wonderful! I love the effort you put into this. Great job.

Nightkit/paw: Good job! Another present-tense RPer; they seem to be getting more and more common. No errors here, aside from a few accidental typos. Good job!

Plumkit: You have potential. ^.^ Just try to work on grammar a bit.

Hawkkit: Good job! No errors here!

Dapplekit: Amazing. Seriously amazing. :3 You have a lot of talent.

Risingkit: Good job! No errors and there’s obviously a fair amount of effort involved. :3 Great!

Runningkit: Great! Again, no problems here~

Cedarpaw: Great! No errors here!

Nightkit: Perfect, aside from too many repetitions of Nightkit. :3 Try to use the word only once every few sentences so it doesn’t sound too repetitive.

Sprucekit: No errors. Good!

Chestnutkit: Great job! :3 No errors here.

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There are still more to do. Tomorrow I will complete pages 6 to 8. :3 Great job, all of you!.

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