The Wolven Cronicles...Chapter 46...A free wolven!

[wolkoff]

Wolfblade sighed, sitting in the council room...With Gub gub...Shintori..The arch mage, Vecor, Greldor, And Night...A Map of wolven spread across the table...and several chess like peices on diffrent points...Rooks representing Towers...Kings Representing the Two main Citidels/Casltles...Greyhelm and Nighthelm...Queens Representing the two Capital cities inside and outside as well...of those two Castles...Pawns Representings Diffrent armies..Bishops representing Bigger armies...And Knights Representing...well..knights...And then a few other peices...Some shaped like houses to represent villages...other shaped like trees to show big forests...And treehouses to represent Elven villages. And so on...Vecor then said..."Alrighty...Deathwynd has a Pair of his leigons of undead...Aproching Over here..."He pointed at the Village of Eldar...The last village that we controled in the conenet of shadowtooth..."And Then He has a Group of His Shadow knights, around 7 to 8 of them, aproching The Catfolk capital..." He then pointed to another area, where a group of 9 to 10 pawns were surrounding a Tower..."And Right here...Knights Retreat, is being blockaded by The undead...And the tunnels are filled with undead as well..." He then sighed..."And over here...On the Isle of Magic...Theres a group of necromancers...doing a ritual...I suspect there trying to resummon Wolfbane...sence you killed him Wolfblade.."Vecor gave Wolfblade a respecting nod...And Wolfblade sighed...Then finaly...after a minute of silence...Greldor said..."Over here...We Have taken back Nelth's Retreat..."He said this, him pushing a bit of his hair out of his face...Heh...He was a Shadow elf..so he knew deathwynd pritty well..."And then here...We have a battle going on between a squad of our knights and around 7000 undead...but the knights have a paladin with them..." He then sighed, and sat back in his chair...and The Archmage said.."Shintori..anything to report about Deathwynds plans?" She Asked shintori...Her face covered in the shadow from her hood...But shintori shook her head.."None yet Archmage.." The archmage nodded..then looked at gub gub.."How about you gub gub?" SHe asked..and he nodded..."The Orcs are under seige by Deathwynds elites...the vampires...As well as a army of zombies and a shadow knight...But the orcs also Have taken back Two Villages and a tower...Deldor..Verinth...And Eld Tower..." She nodded as he finished his report..and looked at Night..."And Night, how is the strike force doing...?" She asked..and he responded.."We are starting to take the Continent back, and we took down quite alot of Undead..but we'll need renforcements before we can continue...She nodded...and then looked Derectly at Wolfblade.."And You wolfblade?" He sighed...and then said..."Deathwynd, Has Gotten a Physical form now..." Almost everyone at the table gaped in shock...Muttering...Then Vecor said..."We lose..then..." Wolfblade turned, Eyes flashing..."No...No we do not...We can still win this war...Deathwynd hasnt won yet!" Wolfblade was angry now.."He will not take wolven..our home..from us...Not if i got something to say about it..."I then got up..."Archmage...I have a idea..." He grinned..."Ill need shintori...And Gub gub...To come with me..." Shintori groaned..."ANOTHER one of your ideas!? Didnt the last one lirialy get me killed TWICE!?" Wolfblade chuckled.."Yea...But this is a good one...i think..." She sighed..."Fine..." He Grinned..."Archmage...please call the troops..."She nodded...

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"People of Wolven...Listen to me...But not as a Council member...as a friend...For i come to you in great need...for...i have a idea...that may end this war, but it will be dangerous, and it cant be done with only 3 people..which is why i call you...people of wolven...Sturdy people...Brave people...Powerfull...willfull...The people of wolven...Wolvanians...Now listen, my friends..."The crowd was silent, just watching..."We were here first...And now, Deathwynd wants to take Wolven over, and turn us all into monsters...I dont know about you, but im not gonna put up with that....God he might be...but he has a mortal greed for power...And If we show him, that we are more powerfull...He may leave...Now...people of Wolven...Wolvanians, if you will...Deathwynd is a coward..and a fool..He thinks just because hes a god, he owns wolven...No...Want to know who owns wolven?!" A few people cheered..."THE WOLVANIANS...AND GREYMANE HIMSELF! Now deathwynd, is foolish, to try to attack us...and we will show him no quarter...am i right...Wolvanians!?" The entired crowd started cheering..."WE ARE THE WOLVANIANS! AND WE WILL NEVER SURRENDER! WE ARE A FREE PEOPLE!..."The crowd started cheering...Them cheering in unison..."FOR WOLVEN!"Wolfblade grinned...and then said "Tonight, we become heros, wether we win or not, we still fought for Greyhelm...and all of wolven. Deathwynd will lose many Soldiers this day, thats for sure..."Wolfblade said... the army of around 5000 soldiers Cheering...And screaming... around 500 of them being knights and 100 of them being paladins...Wolfblade Then mounted his horse, The horse wearing Nightsteel armor, while wolfblade wore a set of Elven made armor...The sword of legends straped across his back...He then yelled.."For Greyhelm, the archmage...AND A FREE WOLVANIA!..."He then galloped forth, and so did his army, his modivating speatch from earlier, seeming to speed up there blood flow..."Tonight...There will be blood...And By tommorow morning...Deathwynd will be gone!".(End...Of chapter 46...By the way...please give me Constructive critisism or tell me if you liked it or not...I know my grammar and spelling suck...but still...Oh, and I might be posting other chapters soon, and once im done writing the book...im gonna make a entire website for it...and find a way to make a wolven forum rp...So...Toodaloo!)

[Badger]

My Critique:

You go "..." way too many times. Its hard to tell where a sentence ends, or even if a sentence ends a lot of the time. Plus its I, not i. There were several times where names where not capitalized. Names are always capitalized. There were indeed several spelling errors. Try using spell check next time. Ignore words you've made up, or you KNOW are correct, and just replace words that need to be spelled correctly.