Poem, Critics Welcome

[Swiftwish]

I just made a poem called Putabam me dilexisti for Koisplash,
(It means I thought you loved me in Latin)

Putabam me dilexisti


Wrinkled Smile, Broken Hearts, I thought I trusted you. I felt safe in your warm arms but now I feel scattered and broken. That faithful day when you kissed her and said that you loved her but no love left for me

Putabam me dilexisti , Putabam me dilexisti, Nemo credere. No trust no love

Lies, Lies, Lies! You claim it was a friend, But I just can’t comprehend I’m sorry this is the end. Kisses, Lullabies, Those sweet roses in front of my door. I’ll have to ignore that it’s gone, though you want more. You kissed her, and once more But I still remember those roses that you left in front of my door. With a note that said

I love you I know for a fact
I love you I just can’t make it an act


Putabam me dilexisti , Putabam me dilexisti, Nemo credere. No trust no love

I know I said I love you I know I said I will never go but Ladies and Gentlemen It’s the end of the show.

Putabam me dilexisti , Putabam me dilexisti, Nemo credere. No trust no love

[Koisplash]

Thankies for the poem, Swiftwish. ^_^
In my opinion, it's good. VERY good.

[hootfoot]

why is this in art sharing??

[Ivycloud]

Because it is a form of art.
But I kinda think this should be in teh Writing Club.

[Sparkshine]

Wow, that's so beautiful! Your a REALLY good writer Swiftwish! I like how you incorporated two languages! I really like it!

[zeus]

i finally read it (havent because of our little hootkit here) and i thin its great

keep writing like that, its good.

[Venomclaw]

4/5 from me. No reason for the -1 point, but no reason to give that last point.

(4/5 is good from me. I rate most stuff 2/5.)

[Sunblaze]

Venny, you usually don't give ratings at all. X D

And I liked it.

[Luna]

This, Swifty dear, is beautiful~! I WANT MORE! : P

Seriously, you're really good! <3

[Swiftwish]

Honestly guys thank you,

Lets all just forget the Hootkit thing, He/She was may have been an Inernet Troll I don't think a Forth Grader would do such thing.

By the way a Part 2 is coming soon

[Luna]

Yes, lets just pretend it never happened.

Oooh, can't wait to see it~

[Wildheart]

Thats really good Swifty, it's darling >.^ keep writing hun it's deffinatly a skill of yours.

[Swiftwish]

Thank you Wildheart <3

Ok, Part 2 almost done