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Post by Ivycloud on Jun 22, 2011 10:52:16 GMT -6
brindlekit - Nice job! I don't see anything wrong with your post! X3
Dapplepaw - Wow. That was amazing! ^^ Wonderful, spectacular, amazing job! Lol!
Anonymous - That was perfect! Short and sweet! XD
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Post by buzzard on Jun 22, 2011 12:06:53 GMT -6
A sigh escaped his maw, as he rolled onto his back glancing up at the ceiling of the nursery in boredom. His light green eyes traced over every crevice of the den, noticing a few holes that sunlight peeped through. The den was empty, all except for him that was; another one of his little pranks had wound him up here for the rest of the day. It was pure torture forced to stay cooped up in the cramped, and dull excuse for a nursery.
Longingly he glanced outside, lip curling slightly as he watched the other kits letting out purrs of cat-like laughter as they played tag. Sure, tag was pointless but it had to be better then this. It was then that he caught a faint movement out of the corner of his eyes. Almost at once his gaze shifted to the ground eyes narrowing as he spotted a small shiny black arachnid, scuttling across the floor with eight legs. It was curiosity that forced the tom kit to his paws, head bent down, as he stalked easily over to the creature, paws barely skimming the ground.
"Wow.." He breathed, coming to a halt and bending down so he was at eye-level. Cautiously he extended one of his large black paws, and gently prodded it. For now it seemed the creature would entertain the kit, satisfying his boredom.
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Palekit
Kit
Hands in the air if you support LionXIce!
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Post by Palekit on Jun 27, 2011 12:23:41 GMT -6
A small, newborn pale ginger she-cat awoke to a bright blue, cloudless morning. She got to her sand coloured paws, stretched, and shook some scraps of moss off her fur, her blue eyes widening slowly as she woke up. Palekit was cheeky, witty, strong, kind and brave. But she was shy. Really shy. She watched with interest as a small spider dropped onto her paw. Her Mother had told her about these creatures, and the blue-eyed kit was deeply fascinated. She didn't move, trying not to disturb the black thing, and lay down again, trying not to move her paw whilst doing so. She let out a frustrated sigh. "Guess i'm gonna be here for a while." she murmured to herself, as she watched the spider settle down on her paw.
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Post by sweetbird on Jun 29, 2011 16:08:27 GMT -6
A small kit was laying outside the nursery den..her small ear torn and bloddied the velvet staining her pure white fur..her motionless body's fur being stirred by the wind....she brought her head up her ear flickered and she brought herself to her paws...she noticed a kit in the den behind her..her eyes looked tired she took a few steps then fell she let out a small mew as she hit the ground  she sat up and licked her fur..her ear burned and nose itched.she itched her nose and walked towards the small kit..she looked at the spider she was playing with crouched on the other side stairring at the small kits paw..she drew her brown and and blue eyes to the other kits and said "Hello" |
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Post by Goldkit on Jul 1, 2011 8:33:37 GMT -6
Goldkit pounced on a mouse that had got in to the nursery. She pretended to fight with it as if it was a real warrior cat. She picked it up and shook it all over. She then calm down and lay down to rest. She ate the squirrel with such pleasure. It tasted good since the fresh kill was late. She ate the whole mouse. Looking at her belly.It was full of mouse!  |
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Post by Ivycloud on Jul 1, 2011 9:22:26 GMT -6
Sorry I have been inactive guys. ^^"
Okay so;;
Palekit: Nice job! ^^
sweetbird: Try being a little more neat with your post. Spaces and one period after a sentence. Also, please change your name to Sweetkit.
Goldpaw: Just watch your grammar; mkay? ^^ |
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Post by Goldkit on Jul 1, 2011 9:27:17 GMT -6
I fixed mine a little is it better?
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Post by Tidekit on Jul 2, 2011 16:35:06 GMT -6
Tidekit wandered away from his mother, as distracted as possible. Life was so amazing outside! Tall, thick pine tree's, frost, bushes, a fresh-kill pile. . . everything. Everything was so interesting on his first day outside. Shadefrost finally let him out. Yes! He stopped at a bush. He was going to hide in it, then jump out, but he was distracted by a stunningly beautiful flower. It was dark scarlet, and it twisted around each neighboring petal. They were curled in tightly together. Just beautiful. He was going to tear it off, but. . . "Ow. . .!" he cried and yelped. There was suddenly three thorns stcuk in his face: One above his eye, one right next to his nose, and one his ear. He whimpered and tried to baack up. But there were thorns all over him. He was trapped. >> I dunno what to do now xD |
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Post by Snowfeather on Jul 4, 2011 11:45:23 GMT -6
Snowkit looked out of the nursery,her first time out! A feather lazily floated past Snowkit's nose,she batted it with a paw and watched it fall to the ground. Snowkit looked around the clearing. She could see apprentices playing by their dens, warriors sharing tonuges and elders basking in the sunlight. The deptuy was sending patrols out, cats coming back from hunting. Snowkit walked to the medicine cats den and looked inside. It smelled of herbs and sickness,she heard coughing and hurried along. This time she stopped at the elder's den,Snowkit walked in and sat down for a story.
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Post by Fellkit on Jul 7, 2011 18:46:18 GMT -6
"Ow!" Fellkit squeaked, feeling a paw squash her dappled gray-and-black tail. The other kit, oviously older, lifted his foot off her foot and snorted.
W-was that amusement in his eyes?! Fellkit thought, eyes glittering with anger. Her tail higj, she marched over to the tom and shoved him right off his feet. He growled and turned around, fur bristling at her.
"What was that for?!" he gave her a little kitten snarl and leaped at her, and the two rolled into a play-fight. Fellkit twisted and nipped the tom's foot, making him leap off her and stand with his tail puffed out. But suddenly Fellkit could feel her scruff being pulled and noticed a queen was holding her up.
"Now, now," her mew was muffled with kit-fur. "You two will make great warriors, but cant you fight somewhere else?" She set Fellkit down and pushed her haunches, making her scamper out. Then she was amazed of how much she could see, and she could feel the lightly-affecting sun of leaf-bare touch her. How... amazing! She thought.
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Sandkit
Apprentice
Do Da Ninja Dance![Mo0:0]
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Post by Sandkit on Jul 7, 2011 20:17:47 GMT -6
Sandkit sat outside the nursery and she sighed to herself. "what am i going to do?" she looked around the camp not knowing what to do. She spotted a fresh kill pile twice her size,"maybe," sh thought to herself,"I could just climb to the top!" she put one of her paws on a squirrel, the other on a vole. She jumpped up a little higher when,"aahh!" she fell and a large bird fell on top or her. she felt like the whole clan was watching her!
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Post by thornkit on Jul 7, 2011 21:18:49 GMT -6
Thornkit woke up with the bright sun shining on her face, being a very observant kit she quickly noticed a black thing on the floor. The small black she-cat scurried over to the awkward bug, her eyes shining with curiosity. At first the multi-legged thing didn't make a single movement but then it suddenly moved, a startled Thornkit swatted at the insect.
"Thornkit, leave that spider alone." One of the Queens told her. The spider quickly crawled away. "Fox dung!" Thornkit spat, she couldn't wait until she was a warrior so she could swat as many spiders as she wanted.
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Post by Shadefrost on Jul 11, 2011 20:34:05 GMT -6
THANK YOU, Ivy. I've been planning to do this myself for a while, but I got lazy. xD
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Tidekit, Fellkit, and Thornkit: I didn't see any problems with your posts. o3o Great! Snowkit, yours was almost perfect. Usually a space is placed after a comma. The sentences were a tiny bit run-on in places as well, but otherwise it was good. Nice and clear. Sandkit, same as Snowkit with the space thing. : D Just watch the spaces and capitalization, and you'll be fine. o-o-o-o-o-o-o
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Post by Whitekit on Jul 18, 2011 15:37:42 GMT -6
Whitekit dashed out of the nest, kicking up moss behind him. Today was the day he would be an apprentice. It was so exciting. He felt as if he had all of Cloudclan giving him energy. Finally he calmed down a bit, ready for the ceremony. He was thinking about who his mentor might be. Wildstar would be a very cool mentor. 'If Wildstar was my mentor then maybe I would be the best warrior ever, maybe even the next deputy.' New excitement flooded his veins and he had to force himself to calm back down. Today was his day, and nobody was going to put him down. ||Word Count|| 112
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Post by finchwing on Jul 18, 2011 20:29:53 GMT -6
A small tabby-brown she-cat walked in the nursery and saw a small black shape it was a bug, she thought. She walked up and poked it with one tiny claw. The bug ran away, she jumped when it moved then ran after it pouncing on the small creatcher. The small kit peered curiusly at the bug under her paw, as she did so it ran from her paws. Upset her toy got away she blunder after it trying to see if she could catch it again but she couldn't find it, disappointed she walked out to find someone to play with.
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she sat up and licked her fur..her ear burned and nose itched.she itched her nose and walked towards the small kit..she looked at the spider she was playing with crouched on the other side stairring at the small kits paw..she drew her brown and and blue eyes to the other kits and said "Hello" 
