A young dream

[devilstorm]

Her name was Katlin, she was a young wolf. Who was a runt she was known as a meatless she-wolf there for all picked on her. One day her head lowered and a whimper fell from her mouth, she trudged threw the forest and sighed.

It was a dark cold night, and it was raining. But she walked on her eyes watered with burning hot tears sorrow full in her. Her chest burned and her breathing was slow and hard.

She came to a hill and stood there for what seemed to be moons, Unblinking Unmoving unbreathing. She though was sure enough alive, she looked up at the moon. Her head tilting back and her lips parting in a '0' she howled long hard and loud "I am a normal She-wolf, I may be weak! But i have feelings! and some day! I promise you! I WILL GET MY DREAM OF BEING A WOLF QUEEN!" She howled

[firesoul]

This story was fine, but I think you could have done better. Perhaps give a bit of her past, and continue the story. It was rather short, and the Wolf Queen thing didn't make that much sense.

This isn't personal, just some advice.

[devilstorm]

That was just a beginning, I will write a whole story now