Bondries

[Ravenfrost]

I am going to try and write a book, so here is a preview.

Prologue-
I heard a thud against the walls, the metal ting that had rung through the steel wall. I had my eyes closed, but soon enough they had opened, my body was cold and the ground was hard. I was breathing shallow from the fear that went thorough me. The back of my neck felt hot with nervousness, from my thoughts.
Was I next?
I heard clunking of boots on the ground outside my cell, there were no windows so I soon jumped back, but my legs weren't stable enough to hold me and I soon fell onto the ground. I sat up, seeing blood where I was laying. I looked at myself the best I could, I wasn't in my T-shirt and jeans, I was wearing pure black that now had splotches of dark maroon. I pulled the sleeve up to see ugly cuts that now draped my arms. The footsteps stopped right outside my door.
The little slot opened in the door, fear heightened inside of me, but soon it closed and the person had moved on, but I couldn't help thinking he might be back.

[Darkstar]

First off, it's "Boundaries"

Secondly, since it is quite rude to just pop in and not offer anything about actually content . . .

It seems quite interesting. I noticed multiple run-ons in the entire piece. Try reading it outloud or something. Commas are cool and all, and I'm glad that you are using them, put your poor period button is being neglected because of it's use. There are ways to get around this little thing.

You: "I had my eyes closed, but soon enough they had opened, my body was cold and the ground was hard. "

Possilblity 1: I had my eyes closed, but soon enough they had opened. (I feel that this could be worded differently as it is. Kind of awkward, but does get the point across. Anyway . . .) My body was cold and the ground was hard.

--Simple enough--