what do you guys think?

[Cherryheart]

i have been working on my series for a while and thats where i got my fave warrior name:Cherryheart its called sabertooth and this is book 4 so i will type a bit
Prolouge
The snow white she tooth padded around. She was breaking the rules that her father appointed. But she loved him,she needed him she did not care what her mother Cherryheart her father Fawnstar what her mother calls him fawnberry they say he is one with the dark butno he has a heart they say he hates me but he dosent he takes me places he knowes that id love.She herd a movement she let her claws out.everything whent black.
Chapter one
Cherryheart padded around worried. "fawnberry!"she shouted"What?"fawnstar asked"im worried about snowball she is not back yet can you go find her?"she asked"ok i will"he said.Fawnstar went out to the forest and whent far and saw Snowball on the ground. He grabbed her by the tail and brought her to the medicine cat den"i found her Cherryheart"he said"Stary home what happend"she asked.Snowball awoke"what where am i?"she asked"you in the med den"she said"i-i was attacked by a dark grey figure with a red flame on his head attack me"she said. Cherryheart looked at Fawnstar"Blackfire"they both exclamed

a quote that i like that is in chapter 2 is:snowball padded up to Snowkill"snowkill im still in love with you"she said

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i love it mind doing chapter 2 and three A?

[Cherryheart]

ok
Chapter 2
Snowballsnuk out again but went for grave clan and saw Snowkill. Snowball padded up to snowkill"Snowkill im still in love with you"she said closeing her eyes and put her head on his shoulder"do you?"she asked purring"snowball ive been meaning to tell you"he said"what?"she asked"i dont love you anymore"he said"im in love with Icyclaw"he said"i hate you"she hissed furiousley"my parents where right,you never loved me!"she hissed again running back home in tears.Icyclaw jumped down from the tree touching noses with Snowkill"so to what you asked earlier yes i will be your mate"she mewed
Chapter three
Cherryheart awoke in the middle of the night hearing her kit crying"whats wrong Snowball?"she asked"you and dad where right he dosent love me"she said in tears"he is in love with Icyclaw"she said again"i wish i never met him"she said again"i hate him and all i want to do is kill him"she hissed. Fawnstar awoke"never ever do that again"he said"you learnt your lesson now go to sleep,You owe me and your mother a moon of cleaninng that's the entire clan"he said"good night"he growld. Icyclaw and Snowkill herd the conversation"not unless we kill you first"they both wisperd

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wow uh 4 and 5 i just love this

[Cherryheart]

*sighs*fine
Chapter 4
Sherry padded around"Scar!"she called"Yes Sherry"he said"have you seen crestent?"she asked"no i havent last i saw him he was out with shadow and Blackfire"he said"Verry well"she sighted
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Fawnstar awoke to the feeling of leaf bare"its not even leaf bare"he mumbled then he went to the star rock"everyone gather arround for a clan meeting!"he shouted.Cherryheart looked in confushion we just did the ceremonies what now?she thought then she went for the star rock with the rest of the clan."is it just me or dose it feel like leaf bare?"he asked"it dose"they all shouted"Snowball,Fireblaze and Berrystripe you shall tell the other clans that we are having a emidiet evacuation"he shouted"brace for evac
he said.
Chapter 5
Snowball was the one to go to grave clan. She saw a patrol and then clibed a tree and went around the patrol. She ran for Sorrowstar"What are you doing here little runt?"he hissed"i have a message from Fawnstar"she gulped nervousley"and?"he asked impatiently"he says that lightclan is having an emergency evac due to the feeling of leaf bare at the begging of greenleaf"she said"we are comming two"he said"Deputy!"he called"yes?"snowkill asked then saw snowball and hissed"tell the clan we are leaving"he said"now!"he hissed
Chapter 6
After letting all the clans know lightclan grabbed there last meal here at the river."we good?"fawnstar asked"yes"the clans said walking to the way that snowball's tail flicked
(to be contiued)
thats all i got